Comments on: VI – Obscured Clarity

By: Tailz

Tailz — Thu, 09 Oct 2008 04:45:57 +0000

Beauty fight scene at the end, leaving you guessing as to why they were going to be captured. Gotta love a cliffhanger ending.

Makes me wonder why Cerberus didn’t just come back and help them. Gives me this crazy thought that he someone forced the guards to do what they did, but somehow, I’m doubting that…

And I’m with Seeker: there was a grand lack of Tailz in this chapter. See to that in the future eh?

By: Dan Hughes

Dan Hughes — Sun, 24 Aug 2008 23:30:08 +0000

Thanks for the support guys

By: Kris

Kris — Sun, 24 Aug 2008 23:07:54 +0000

Wow! This chapter consisted of so much in something so simple as leaving Tel and going on the road. I’m loving that Xia is the focus for awhile, and Cerberus’s character is developing well in the shadows and that slap from Deia was priceless. The fight scene was very dramatic! Well done! I don’t know if it’s the story or your writing that’s improving more, but I can’t wait for the next chapter!

By: Scorpio

Scorpio — Thu, 21 Aug 2008 09:45:46 +0000

Heh, great chapter. I love this story so far, and I like that touch of showing the Spheric in Xia’s memory. So indeed, another great installment and I can’t wait for what the next chapter will bring, so keep it up!

By: Seeker

Seeker — Wed, 20 Aug 2008 21:32:24 +0000

I really liked this one, and I’m looking forward to Deia’s developement now. Both of the girls, actually. Not quite enough Tailz, for my tastes, but wondering what his plans are is entertaining in itself!
Wah!! Cliffhanger!!!

By: Fenix

Fenix — Tue, 19 Aug 2008 00:46:30 +0000

Forgot to comment last night but I liked the chapter. We’ve already discussed any concerns or specific comments I had over AIM so keep up the good work, Dan.