Comments on: IX – Burns Upon Burns http://spheric.starraisers.com/2009/06/28/ix-%e2%80%93-burns-upon-burns/ The Site for SPHERIC: Landing, the first work of future author Dan Hughes. Mon, 24 May 2010 05:03:11 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.1 By: ruth http://spheric.starraisers.com/2009/06/28/ix-%e2%80%93-burns-upon-burns/comment-page-1/#comment-2173 ruth Wed, 12 Aug 2009 17:05:04 +0000 http://spheric.starraisers.com/?p=139#comment-2173 Very good Part to much going on really quickly though but still really good! Very good Part to much going on really quickly though but still really good!

]]> By: Wolf http://spheric.starraisers.com/2009/06/28/ix-%e2%80%93-burns-upon-burns/comment-page-1/#comment-1678 Wolf Thu, 02 Jul 2009 18:09:54 +0000 http://spheric.starraisers.com/?p=139#comment-1678 Very nice ending to part one. The flow needs to be worked on. Dont keep on bouncing from the events on the planet to Heir back to the planet then back to Travis then back to the planet. Keep things flowing. But other then that an excellent well done part one of the story line Very nice ending to part one. The flow needs to be worked on. Dont keep on bouncing from the events on the planet to Heir back to the planet then back to Travis then back to the planet. Keep things flowing. But other then that an excellent well done part one of the story line

]]> By: Panther http://spheric.starraisers.com/2009/06/28/ix-%e2%80%93-burns-upon-burns/comment-page-1/#comment-1645 Panther Tue, 30 Jun 2009 02:31:50 +0000 http://spheric.starraisers.com/?p=139#comment-1645 Wow...this chapter was awesome! I enjoyed the fight scene and especially when Xia threw Mensch and Tailz around like it was nothing. The chapter was suspensful, exciting, and kept me on the edge of my seat. Wow…this chapter was awesome! I enjoyed the fight scene and especially when Xia threw Mensch and Tailz around like it was nothing. The chapter was suspensful, exciting, and kept me on the edge of my seat.

]]> By: Tailz http://spheric.starraisers.com/2009/06/28/ix-%e2%80%93-burns-upon-burns/comment-page-1/#comment-1644 Tailz Tue, 30 Jun 2009 01:49:54 +0000 http://spheric.starraisers.com/?p=139#comment-1644 Not sure if it's a site error, but the RSS feed didn't show that a new chapters was up at all. Still doesn't... That being said, very well done. Another Scout is coming in. The secrets compile. The action intensifies. ...and I won't say what I usually do. I'm a one-trick pony :P All in all, excellent. I greatly anticipate more. Not sure if it’s a site error, but the RSS feed didn’t show that a new chapters was up at all. Still doesn’t…

That being said, very well done. Another Scout is coming in. The secrets compile. The action intensifies. …and I won’t say what I usually do. I’m a one-trick pony :P

All in all, excellent. I greatly anticipate more.

]]> By: Seeker http://spheric.starraisers.com/2009/06/28/ix-%e2%80%93-burns-upon-burns/comment-page-1/#comment-1643 Seeker Tue, 30 Jun 2009 01:42:29 +0000 http://spheric.starraisers.com/?p=139#comment-1643 Too many commas that don't belong! And sometimes, a missing comma. Overall, very nicely done, it made me cry...again. Too many commas that don’t belong! And sometimes, a missing comma.

Overall, very nicely done, it made me cry…again.

]]> By: Deia http://spheric.starraisers.com/2009/06/28/ix-%e2%80%93-burns-upon-burns/comment-page-1/#comment-1642 Deia Tue, 30 Jun 2009 01:30:40 +0000 http://spheric.starraisers.com/?p=139#comment-1642 Not enough Deia, but I guess I can survive. Nice chapter man, looking forward to the next update. Not enough Deia, but I guess I can survive.

Nice chapter man, looking forward to the next update.

]]> By: Fenix http://spheric.starraisers.com/2009/06/28/ix-%e2%80%93-burns-upon-burns/comment-page-1/#comment-1640 Fenix Tue, 30 Jun 2009 00:19:06 +0000 http://spheric.starraisers.com/?p=139#comment-1640 I'm impressed Cerberus. You're improving with each chapter at this rate, and while I noticed the occasional grammar mistake here and there, it was done very well. There were a couple parts where you jumped from one character's perspective to another's mid-scene, especially with thoughts. It's something I'm prone to doing myself so I'm kinda critical about it, as much to remind myself as anything. All in all, it was a good set up for the next part of the story. Xia's the leader now and the group has a new destination in mind, Tailz is searching for greater understanding of his Spheric, and in space, we see something interesting building up with Heir and Travis. I'm looking forward to what comes next. Thanks for posting Cerb. I’m impressed Cerberus. You’re improving with each chapter at this rate, and while I noticed the occasional grammar mistake here and there, it was done very well. There were a couple parts where you jumped from one character’s perspective to another’s mid-scene, especially with thoughts. It’s something I’m prone to doing myself so I’m kinda critical about it, as much to remind myself as anything.

All in all, it was a good set up for the next part of the story. Xia’s the leader now and the group has a new destination in mind, Tailz is searching for greater understanding of his Spheric, and in space, we see something interesting building up with Heir and Travis. I’m looking forward to what comes next. Thanks for posting Cerb.

]]> By: Scorpio http://spheric.starraisers.com/2009/06/28/ix-%e2%80%93-burns-upon-burns/comment-page-1/#comment-1629 Scorpio Mon, 29 Jun 2009 09:23:32 +0000 http://spheric.starraisers.com/?p=139#comment-1629 Wow, this is a great addition to the story. Perfect ending for Part I as well! I like it, quite a bit! Keep up the good work!!! Wow, this is a great addition to the story. Perfect ending for Part I as well! I like it, quite a bit!

Keep up the good work!!!

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